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All my accomplishments were hard won, but one stands out as the most difficult of all and provided the most satisfaction. Losing over 60 pounds in one year ranks as my greatest achievement. Sacrifices were made, changes were implemented and physical and mental boundaries were stretched.
For as long as I can remember food was always abundant. Although I was never overweight, my eating habits were not the best and I was never interested in physical activities. Eventually my luck ran short and without noticing, I began gaining weight, little by little, until my sophomore year. At the age of fifteen, at 5’ 8” I already weighed 185 pounds, by all measures I was considered overweight.
My moment of revelation literally stared me in the face—I looked in the mirror and didn’t recognize the reflection; I was disgusted with my form. From that day forward I decided not to be part of the growing 65% overweight Americans, instead I wanted to join the shrinking 35%. That was no ordinary day for me; it was the day a goal was set.
Dieting was the beginning of my journey. My plan was to eat one big meal per day, but it could consist of any type of food. After one miserable month I was grateful to find that my weight had fallen to 165.
At the second stage of my diet I did some research. I read that to speed up my metabolism I should eat five small portions of healthy food a day. The technique proved to work amazingly well; after eight weeks I weighed in at 140 pounds. This reading put me at the average level for my height, but there’s the problem, I’m not average I’m above and beyond average.
There was still something missing—exercise. Porky’s Gym became my new hang out and provided more than enough equipment to burn off my excess fat and sculpt my body. Six months into a dedicated aerobic and weight-lifting program resulted in satisfaction on the scale my ideal weight, 125 pounds.
Combining diet, exercise and will power finally resulted in a loss of 60 pounds. I feel ten times healthier and I’m proud that I was able to set my mind to a goal and successfully complete it. Through sheer determination I was able to achieve my greatest accomplishment of becoming a lean-mean fat burning machine.

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